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Aku nggak tahu apa salahku. Aku ngerasa belakangan ini dietku udah cukup ketat kok. Tapi kenapa sih sang pipi ini tetep juga melar. Mana orang-orang yang ngeliatnya pada pengen nyubitin lagi. Bikin tambah sebel. Pokoknya sebel… sebel… sebel… Sebeel banget. Apa salahku? Hix…hix…Apa jangan-jangan salah dari turunan gen-gen ayahanda dan ibunda tercinta yah yang bikin pipiku tembem begini. Gak juga ah. Mereka gak gendut kok.

I don't know what my fault is. I feel that these days I have been keeping my diet pretty tight. But how come this my dear cheek is still stretchy. And a lot of people who take a look at it want to pinch it. It makes me more resentful. It is resentful... resentful... resentful... Veeeery resentful. What is my fault? Weep... Weep... did the fault come from the descendant from my beloved father and mother that makes my cheek really puffed-up. I don't think so. They are not fat either.

Tapi kalo dipikir-pikir lagi kok malang juga yah nasibku.
Aku ingat betul ketika aku masih kecil. Kira-kira seumuran lima tahun lah; saudara-saudaraku datang ke rumah. Dan mereka semua lantas begitu bahagia melihat wajahku. Bukannya apa-apa dan kenapa-napa. Mereka seperti dapet mainan baru.
Mainan apa? Apalagi kalau bukan pipiku yang menggemaskan ini. Dicubit pipi kiri, dicubit pipi kanan. Mereka sih seneng-seneng aja. Ketawa ketiwi. Nggak tahu apa bahwa yang empunya pipi ini merasakan sebuah derita lahir dan batin. Perih di pipi, perih pula di hati. Sampe akhirnya aku menangis… Huaaaaa. Mereka baru berhenti. Ganti mengelus-elus
"Cup cup anak manis jangan nangis dong."

But if I really think about it again my fate was really unfortunate.
I remembered truely when I was still small. Approximately when I was five years old; my relatives came to my house. And all of them then were so happy to see my face. Not anything and and not anywhy. They seemed like they got a new toy.
What toy? What else if not my cheek that passionated them. They pinched the left cheek, then pinched the right cheek. They were so very happy then. Laugh laugh. They did not know that the owner of this cheek felt a suffering on both the body and heart. Pain on the cheek, pain also in the heart. Until the end I cried… Huaaaaa. Only then they stopped, changed to caressing.
"Choop choop the sweet child should not cry please."

Lebih parah lagi waktu aku SMA, aku inget banget ada temanku bernama Rudi. Anak yang menurut pandanganku termasuk paling badung satu sekolahan. Emang sih secara umum anaknya baik, gak ngerokok, taat aturan sekolah bahkan Pancasila dan UUD’45, gak pernah bolos, lumayan pinter dan berprestasi pula. Lha terus kenapa kok aku anggep badung? Ya itu tuh. Dia paling demen cubitin pipiku. Aku ngelamun dikit dicubit. Aku lengah dikit dicubit. Mana cubitannya konsekutif dan konsekuen lagi. Setiap hari. Sehari tiga kali. Sehabis makan dan sebelum tidur ( kok kaya minum obat aja yah ). Yaah pokoknya pada intinya sering banget deh.

It was more serious when I was in SENIOR HIGH SCHOOL, I remember truely that I had a friend named Rudi. A child that according to my view is one of the naughtiest on the school. It is indeed generally the child was good, not smoking, obeyed the school rule and even the national ideology and national law, never skipped class even once, moderately clever and high-achieving also. Well then why how come I said that he is naughty? Yes, because of that. He liked to pinch my cheek very much. If I daydream a little I was pinched. When I was careless a little I was pinched. His pinches were consecutive and consistent. Every day. Three times a day. After eating and before sleeping (how come it looks like taking medicine?). Yeah no matter what it was really often.

Aku pikir sih ketika masuk kuliah pengalaman-pengalaman memilukan itu akan berakhir. Apalagi kan aku masuk ke univ yang cukup ternama. Ehem… ehem… Aku yakin deh, anaknya pasti pinter-pinter, baik-baik, dan alim-alim. Uuuh tapi kenyataan tak seindah impian. Temen-temen disini masih aja suka ngeledekin aku gendut. Masih juga jahil-jahil. Untungnya sih gak ada lagi yang suka nyubit-nyubit pipi ini. Hahaha.
Maklumlah soalnya kan aku udah beri larangan keras bagi siapapun. Termasuk sahabat-sahabat dekat. Mengagumi boleh tapi tak boleh menyentuh. Apalagi mencubit. Dilarang keras. Verboden. Tiba-tiba….

I thought when I went to university, the sympathetic experiences will end. Moreover I entered to a university that was famous enough.
Ehem… ehem… I was convinced, the students were definitely very clever, well, and very devout. Ugh ugh but the reality was not as beautiful as the dream. Friends here still liked to tease that I was fat. Still were also very rascal. Fortunately there was no one that liked to pinch this cheek. Hahaha. They understand that in this matter I have given them a ban for everyone. Including close friends. They might admire me but it is not allowed to touch me. Not even pinch. Banned hard. Verboden. And suddenly….

Buk!
"Adaw… "
"Pagi Gina," sapa si Yanti dari belakang dengan senyumnya yang cerah. Tanpa rasa bersalah atau berdosa seikitpun.
Duh… duh.. aduuuh…
"Kenapa, aku mukul terlalu keras yah?"
"Masih nanya lagi. Sakit tauk."
"Maap deh maap. Abis kamu juga lagian. Pagi-pagi gini udah ngelamun. Mikirin sapa tuh? Si uhuy yah…"
"Idiiih… thanks yo. Gak ada istilah uhuy-uhuyan dalam kamus gw.. "
"Yah elah pake sok-sokan."

Bam!
"Ouch..."
"Morning, Gina," Yanti greets me with his bright smile. Without any feeling of guilty or sinful.
Ouch.. ouch... a-ouch..
"Why, did I hit you very hard?"
"No question asked. Very painful you know!"
"Sorry, sorry. It is your fault anyway. Even on a morning you were daydreaming. Who were you thinking about? The Uhuy guy?"
"Oh no!!!!, very thanks to you. No meaning of Uhuy in my dictionary.."
"How come you are putting on airs."

Sebenernya si uhuy yang dimaksud tak lain dan tak bukan adalah Gunawan, seorang cowo yang juga sejurusan dengan mereka. Sebenernya sih tuh cowo biasa aja. Bener-bener biasa deh. Semuanya biasa. Rambut biasa, mata biasa, wajah biasa, senyum biasa, pinternya juga biasa. Cuma satu yang luar biasa ..... garingnya luar biasa. Kadang2 sih aku suka sempet sebel dibuatnya. Tapi di satu sisi dia bisa ngertiin aku apa adanya. Jadi hati ini gak jadi sebel lagi deh. Jadi luluh, adem ayem deh dibuatnya.

In fact the Uhuy meant actually is Gunawan, a person that is also in the same course with them. In fact the boy is a normal boy. Very truly normal. All are normal. Normal hair, normal eyes, normal face, normal smile, the cleverness is also normal. Only one is extraordinary.... His lameness is extraordinary. Sometimes I am resentful because of him. But on one hand he can accept me the way I am. So this heart become not resentful again. I am crushed, cool and calm because of him.

Belakangan ini si Gunawan itu emang lagi deket ama aku. Gak tahu juga deh kenapa bisa begitu. Sehingga mulailah beredar kabar-kabar tidak sedap di kalangan mahasiswa. Isu-isu dan gossip yang tak jelas dari mana asal mulanya. Parah deh. Padahal bener deh aku dan si Gunawan itu cuma temen biasa. Ndak ada apa-apa, ataupun gimana-gimana. Sueer….

In recent times the Gunawan guy is actually very close to me. I don't know why could be like that. So not-nice news are beginning to circulate in between students. Rumours and unclear gossips which I don't know where are their origin at first. Seriously. In fact it is true that I and the Gunawan guy are only normal friends. Nothing happened, or whatever it is. I swear...

Masalahnya kekuatan gossip itu uda lebih kuat. Jadilah malah tuh cowo bisa sampe dapet titel uhuy. Sebagai info, sebenarnya kata uhuy itu dianugrahkan sebagai kata ganti orang ketiga tunggal bagi orang yang lagi dalam proses PDKT. Nah, sebutan kata uhuy untuknya menandakan dia lagi PDKT ama aku. Apa bener sih begitu? Mana aku tahu… dan lagian mana aku tempe?

The problem is that gossip power even much stronger. Therefore, that guy even get title: uhuy. For your information, uhuy is stated for a third singular person representative on a guy which is in "approaching" process. So, the uhuy statement show that he is in process of approaching me. Is it true? Who knows?

Kalo emang bener begitu rasanya sih gak sepenuhnya bener deh. Coba aja lihat tingkahnya. Dia toh kayanya emang bergaul dengan cara yang serupa dengan segala macem temen cewenya. Kadang-kadang rada usil pula. Ah, dasar laki-laki. Untung dia gak suka usilin aku dengan pipiku yang menggemaskan ini. Kalo gak bisa sudah hancur berkeping-keping persahabatan yang aku bangun dengannya selama ini.

I think it’s not necessarily true. Look at his behavior. He talk and behave in the same way with all his friends (girl). Sometimes, a bit naughty. Ah, damn guy. Fortunately, he doesn’t like to pinch my cheek, otherwise our good relationship which is maintained so far will be destroyed.

Tapi aku toh cuek-cuek aja ah. Dia toh juga sering cuek ama aku. Emang sih kadang-kadang jadi perhatiaaan buanget, tapi kadang-kadang cuek juga. Aku bingung deh. Kata temen-temen sih sebenernya dia itu suka sama aku. Kalo di sinetron-sinetron remaja masa kini sih disebutnya jatuh cinta githu.

However, I just don't ignore. He also does the same thing to me. Sometimes, reaallyyyy care, sometimes he is ignorant. I’m confused. My friends said that he likes me. In teenagers telenovela, it is said as fall in love.

Yah kalo emang bener githu sih ya ga pa pa. Soalnya, benernya aku juga lumayan simpatik kok sama dia. Ramah, baik, perhatian. Yah meski emang garingnya parah sih. Tapi okelah. Yang paling penting. Ia gak suka ngatain aku gendut. Dan gak suka nyubitin pipi.

If it is true, it’s ok for me. Coz actually I also quite put a symphaty to him. He is cheerful, kind, caring. Even though he is lame. Sooo lame. But it’s ok. The most important thing, he doesn’t say I am fat, and he doesn’t pinch my cheek.

Suatu ketika Gunawan mengajakku makan siang bareng. Yah, aku sih oke oke aja. Kenapa tidak? Sekalian kan aku bisa pinjem catetan lecturenya kemaren. Maklumlah kemaren aku ketiduran. Lagi kebanyakan pikiran. Cieeh kayak orang penting aja. Hohoho….
Kami duduk, diam, dan tenang. Sebelum kami sempet order makanan, Gun mulai membuka pembicaraan lebih awal….

One day, Gunawan ask me to have lunch together. I am ok to his offer. Why not? I can also borrow his lecture note for yesterday lesson. I was sleeping in lecture theatre yesterday. So many think and stuff… Like a businessman you know. Hohohoho...
We sit, be quiet, and calm. Before we order the food, Gun starts to speak:

"Gina, aku tahu pipimu tembem."
"Grrr, apaan sih. Terus kenapa?"
Aku sebel. Aku pikir dia bener-bener ngertiin aku, ternyata dia juga bilang aku gendut. Tidaaak… Kenapa mesti ada satu orang lagi yang mesti mengungkapkan “fakta" itu kepadaku.
"Banyak orang bilang pipi tembem itu gak begitu bagus."
"Iyah, aku emang jelek, " kataku cemberut. Sensi.
"Tapi…. " kata Gun lagi…
"Tapi apa?! seruakku dengan sewot…. Sebel sebel…
"Ups, kamu marah ya?" Tanya Gun dengan muka melas nan memprihatinkan. Ngeliat mukanya aku pun luluh.
"Nda... nda pa pa. Kenapa sih Gun?"jawabku dengan rileks
"Tapi, tapi… aku… aku mau ngomong sesuatu ama kamu Gin. Penting.." kata Gun sambil menundukkan wajahnya. Entah dia malu atau takut... atau sungkan?

"Gin, I know your cheek is stretchy."
"Grrr, so what?"
I am angry. I think he really can understand me. But he also said I am fat. Nooo, why must there be one more person who reveal that “fact" to me?
"Many people said that stretchy cheek is not so good."
"Yeah, I am ugly," I said frownly. Sensitive.
"But…" Gun says again.
"But what?’ I say angrily. Resentful… resentful.
"Ups, are you angry? Gun asked melancholicly. Seeing his face, I melt.
"nooo… no problem? What’s wrong, Gun?" I ask relaxly.
"but… I… I want to say something to you Gin. Important," Gun said bowing down his face. Either he is shy or scary?

Deg! Jantungku berdegup kencang. Dan makin lama makin kencang. Aku ndak tahu perasaan aneh apa yang ada pada diriku sekarang. Aaaargh mana mungkin. Mana mungkin. Darahku berdesir makin kencang. Dag dig dug. Kenapa dengan diriku? Masa Gun bisa membuat aku begini?

Deg! My heart beats very fast. And become faster and faster. Aaargh impossible. Impossible. My blood flows quicker. What’s wrong with me? Why can Gun make me like that?

Ia melanjutkan kata-katanya… masih dengan terbata-bata…
"Aku…. aku…"
"Apa?"
"Boleh gak Gin aku?"

He continues his statement… still with tremble…
"I…. I…"
"What?"
"Gin, could I...?"

Pikiranku makin melayang nda karu2an. Sampai2 aku lupa kalo tujuan awal ke kantin ini adalah untuk makan siang. Hmmm, apa mungkin sih kata teman2nya selama ini benar? Gun selama ini diam2…. aaargh, wajahku memerah, tapi aku nda mau Gun tahu. Kalo sebenernya... Jangan dulu. Aku tundukkan wajahku. Rasanya ia akan mengatakan kata itu. Ya pasti ia akan mengatakan kata itu…
.
.
.

My thought flies away. I almost forget that I go here to have lunch. Is it true that his friends gossip about Gun is true? Gun so far… without any words… Arrgh… my face turn red, but I don’t want Gun knows. That the truth… Don’t
I bow down my face. I feel that he will say that word. Ya confirmed that he will say that word...
.
.
.

"Gin, aku….. boleh pinjem duit dulu nda? Duitku habis. "

"Gin, could I borrow your money? I don’t have anything left."

Written by: hgs

Ini dia balada Gin dan Gun
Sehabis makan dan sebelum tidur itu sikat gigi, bukan minum obat.
Mana aku "tempe"? Maksa abis....
pasti ia akan mengatakan kata, "boleh pinjem duit dulu nda?"
Dienk...
Jangan2 Gun ini maksudnya Herry GUNadi. Sama garingnya... kriuk-kriuk....
(hore komen pertama)


!peH [sg], 26 Mar 2007, 18:56 reply
klo pengen langsing knapa g konsumsi terapi aj dg nutrisi tiens.dulu saudara q bnyak jg yang gemuk ,tp skrng dh lumayan,bobotny berkurang +-12kg stlh konsumsi nutrisi tiens selama3bln .

fip [id], 7 Apr 2008, 3:57 reply
Tuink tuink... lah memang saya yg nulis cerpen ini. :s :s
Regards
~HgS~


Herry Gunadi Sudibya [sg], 27 Mar 2007, 2:05 reply
beneran nih yang nulis ikut nimbrung berkomentar,by the way buat cerpen sebanyak mungkin ya and jangan lupa di sertai dengan inggrisnya,biar intelegensi kita bertambah.ok '-'

fat-cool [id], 18 Jun 2007, 3:29 reply
mmm.. ^^'
ternyata ini cerita joke ya. harapannya dari pertama sebenernya mo menarik moral dari ceritanya sih


Deri [us], 27 Mar 2007, 15:38 reply
ya ampyuen.........................bgs juge ternyate


lely [id], 8 Jun 2007, 7:43 reply
hai leh kenal

wahyu [id], 3 Oct 2008, 14:58 reply
eh aq gx mw knl ma u

wahyu [id], 4 Nov 2008, 12:00 reply
hai leh kenal

wahyu [id], 3 Oct 2008, 15:07 reply
ckep...bunget sih nt cerpen,,,
agak nggantung sih...
lanjutin yaw,,,
biar lebih bagus getooooo....
be your self...
buat pengarang...kembangin terus ya...
buetlah yang lebih menarik daripada ini...
heheheh,,,,87x


Keyko SukEnti... [id], 18 Nov 2008, 3:42 reply
eee . . . ternyata, ada juga cerita seperti itu yaa,
hmmmm


rozaq [--], 6 Mar 2012, 0:39 reply
Wow, hanya itu yang bisa kuucapkan
Sungguh mendebarkan, tapi di akhirnya aja
Well, Gina... atau siapa sich dia, selamat yah, ... kamu masuk Kejut.com


Lesmanahadi [id], 14 Apr 2007, 10:51 reply
bgus bag.......story x aqu ska

riky [id], 31 Jan 2010, 4:20 reply
She says Gun is lame, too lame alias garink. Ternyata ceritanya juga garink..

AzizJr [id], 3 May 2007, 8:06 reply
asu lah pekok seng gawe sopo. cendik bener asu lah delete ae sempal ngene mending daanku WKwKWkwkwkWk

RaJa_ToGeL_gr4gr3g [id], 21 May 2007, 12:38 reply
aku kasian mau pun garink gua kasi penilaian yg lumayan bukan lumayan deng malah sep paling tinggi kWkWkWkwkwk dari pada ancur nilai dikit

GoReNgAn_KoPoK [id], 21 May 2007, 12:40 reply
i am very like this short story

V_3 [id], 24 May 2007, 7:33 reply
I like this story
I don't know why all of u say that GARING
I dont think so
I just wanna say GOOd


nuyung [id], 30 May 2007, 5:37 reply
saya tertarik dgn crita ini, walaupun saya hanya membaca titlenya saja. tapi saya sangat beruntung karena ini bisa memudahkan bagi para manusia yang malas mentransletnya. thanks ya. mohon untuk di kembangkan ceritanya.saya tunggu.karena ini menyangkut dengan materi pembelajaran saya

fat-cool [id], 18 Jun 2007, 3:25 reply
bagus kok ceritanya...saya terbawa emosi loh sewaktu membaca ceritanya; jadi ingat dengan saat-saat itu sewaktu menembak doi walaupun akhirannya tidak sama seperti cerita yang di atas

Dono [us], 26 Jun 2007, 7:46 reply
eh mantap jg karya kamu ulan print ya untuk baca2...heheheh

ulan [id], 27 Jul 2007, 11:37 reply
neng ndut, walaupun susah yg penting tetep ndut. . .

usha [--], 28 May 2011, 11:56 reply
Thanks buat semua komen2nya yang uda masuk. Semoga bisa jadi bahan improvement saya di masa mendatang.
Kalo ada yang berminat... cerita2 saya yg lain bisa dibaca di http://hgsstory.blogspot.com. (Numpang iklan nih)
Hehehe... Thanks...
Best Regards,
-HgS-penulis


Herry Gunadi Sudibya [sg], 27 Jul 2007, 13:23 reply
yah prtama mbaca sih penasaran banget.aku rsa critanya bkin ktagihan mbaca n' nambah penasaran.critanya detail dari bayi mpe dwasa.tapi kasihanny tiba-tiba waktu Gina pkirannya sudah gk kruan tentang apa yg akan dikatain Gun ternyata hanya mo ngatain pinjem duit cz khabisan duit. kasihn deh Lho Gin

C@ndr@ [id], 28 Jul 2007, 0:58 reply
i apriciete this story. even this site is not strong enough to shake many one. yech.... even if essensial.

fel syaf [id], 27 Aug 2007, 6:53 reply
It's very funny...!ceritanya lumayan menghibur.and kebetulan lagi cari short story..ya udah ambil aje yang ini ho..ho..

cahill [id], 6 Sep 2007, 11:27 reply
Nice Story. Thanks for the Story

Jasmine [id], 17 Sep 2007, 8:21 reply
hahahaha... nice story... very funny...

VioLeT [id], 21 Sep 2007, 4:51 reply
oke lah....makasih ni bisa jadiin inspirasi buat aku....


lola [id], 22 Sep 2007, 12:47 reply
aduuuuhh ...
baGus juGa ternyaTa ...
it's saMe wiTh mE ..
baGus juGa buAt jaDi cErita dePan skoLah .. !!! Xp


cDy kiiiiyuuuuuttt .. [id], 25 Sep 2007, 11:41 reply
NIce and funny story.. Haha..

Nic [id], 26 Sep 2007, 4:03 reply
wahaaaaa...bagus banget
gue ambil ya untuk tugas sekolah....


ronie [id], 19 Oct 2007, 3:50 reply
yuhuuu....what a funny and interesting story. I'll take it for my assignment...yeahaaa!!!!!!!!

ajoest [id], 19 Oct 2007, 12:14 reply
Thanks buat semua complimentnya. I'm happy to hear that. Yang mau buat tugas sekolah boleh2 aja kok. Jgn lupa tulis kutipannya ya. Hehehe... =p
~HgS~
http://hgsstory.blogspot.com


Herry (penulis) [sg], 19 Oct 2007, 13:05 reply
good bgt tw........................bikin lagi dunk..........

samidezka [id], 21 Oct 2007, 3:33 reply
haloooooooooooooooooo

ken [id], 25 Oct 2007, 1:05 reply
it's terible, it's a disaster..
let me guess,, when someone write down something this bad, he or she must has no brain,,
no imagination, no creativity shown, nothing special..
it's just a piece of shit..


Fachri [id], 1 Nov 2007, 6:20 reply
ya ampun....
bener2 ga nyangka masa akhirnya kya gtu....
bagusss.......


mey [id], 6 Nov 2007, 6:31 reply
itZ nice...
gila!!!! bener2 gila!!!
n gila!!!!!
hwa...hwa...hwa...


mordca [id], 11 Nov 2007, 8:58 reply
oh my god..........................
your story is amazing,,,,he..69x


sari [hk], 28 Nov 2007, 9:35 reply
wakakakakakakakakakk...............
lutuna.........lutuna............
sha ampe ketwa/i lhooooooo!!!!
btw,yg bkn nie crpen mang bnr gendut y????
klo bner, sha pgn ikt nyubit dwonk!!!!! hew....


sasha [id], 28 Nov 2007, 10:24 reply
mank na lutu ape......?????????????

untung [id], 18 Jan 2008, 9:54 reply
You are grazy......!

Jackson [id], 1 Dec 2007, 14:33 reply
parah kaga jelas .....
n yang paling parah DATAR BANGET!!!!
kaga seru abis deh...
menang judul doank


vinzky [id], 4 Dec 2007, 17:15 reply
heheheh lumayan lucu kirain mo nyatain
tp yg lebih bgsnya ada transletan b.inggs-nya jd bisa skalian belajar..
bikin lg crita lain dong


mita [id], 7 Dec 2007, 9:25 reply
thank so much,,,,,,,,,,, the story is very nice, this help me to read anymore about short story.
thanks for twice


inot [id], 8 Dec 2007, 17:18 reply
saya pikir nich ceryta di tujuin m kita2 yang berbadan gendut tapi okelah ..... !!!!! saya setuju2 ja n sempat penasaran tauo.......k

sheila [id], 5 Jan 2008, 14:53 reply
yahuiiiiiiiiiii,mantep bener.......gw bener2 mpe ngerasa kalo gw I'M fat girl nya.ngapain malu ,toh masih banyak orang2 yang lebih gendut dari kita.iya thooooooo......

irma [id], 5 Jan 2008, 14:58 reply
yee...mayand lha~~tp koQ..'SHORT' bgt yaa...?puannjjaaaaaaaaaang......~

mel [id], 3 Aug 2008, 6:56 reply
it's me bgddddddddddd

mon_cwtzs [id], 23 Jan 2008, 7:43 reply
wekekekeke~~~
Ampon DJ! Perut aye ampe pecagh!


FortuneZ [id], 29 Jan 2008, 7:34 reply
saya nggak suka cerpen kamu karna jelek sekali
:(
;


irma [id], 29 Jan 2008, 10:42 reply
too flat, no climax at all even you put the joke in the end, just too flat.

ariemajinarie [id], 8 Feb 2008, 13:40 reply
I DONT KNOW WITH ALL

dede zaenudin [id], 1 Dec 2009, 14:23 reply
ya ampun ga nyangka ya kirainnnnnnnnn mo ngomong apa!!!!!!!ternyata................ minjem duittttttttttt booooooooooooo sekalian aza dia minta dibayarin makan hehehe.....


2 cwe_ cuantik [id], 13 Feb 2008, 2:37 reply
gila Sumpah.......
garINk BgEd Tw Gk?????
tapi...not bad lah...he...he


Hinata [id], 23 Feb 2008, 11:29 reply
ya ampyuuuunnn...............
cerita ne menyentuh banged tw gak???
ampe2 gw ngabisin 2 dus tisu............
bikin lagi duwonx....
tapi.bikinnya yang lebih menantang lagi yaw!!!!


CewE CutHe.....!!!! [id], 23 Feb 2008, 11:35 reply
serius pas gw baca.......
gw juga ikut deg degan.....
lucthu....
bikin lagi donkz....


adel [id], 2 Mar 2008, 2:32 reply
kaga ngerti gw cerita na......
hahahaha.....


Anto [id], 13 Mar 2008, 9:24 reply
cerita kmu bikin perutku mules. sumpah dech! gokil bget......... top abis daaaaaacccchhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!!!

cute girl [id], 27 Mar 2008, 2:43 reply
Hwekekek..cerpeny wokke..b'hub.aye sndiri jg cubby jd kyk byangin q yg ngalami ntu..cubby kn imut..hihi..tul?

Kyu_bie [us], 28 Mar 2008, 4:15 reply
ok

andari [id], 28 Mar 2008, 7:07 reply
whew,,,cuuUuL.....
boleh g critanya Q pake' buat acara tukar plajar ntar...??
;D


reatz_phaloephie [id], 29 Mar 2008, 4:41 reply
he eh

AGUS [id], 8 May 2010, 4:15 reply
boleh juga nech ceritanya.................!!!!

Ritoh anisyah cesf [id], 31 Mar 2008, 11:15 reply
akk sehh lum bacaa .
[maka'a gk bisa kasih rating'a]
phy , ngeliad komen'a ajj , kek'a ne cerpen seru laa .
^____^


keripikk [id], 24 Apr 2008, 10:23 reply
Ya. . .
Thanks a lot
cerpen kamu udah bantu aku n friends nyelesaiin tugas kita dengan nilai bagus . . . .
Sukses iawh to karier nya . . . . . .


GeCiT [id], 12 May 2008, 8:24 reply
Biarpun Q lom bca smuaX.........
boleh dunk Q ambil bwat tugas................
he,he,he,he,,,,


vick [id], 21 May 2008, 7:30 reply
i tinhk the sroty is fnnuy! fsrit is nmroal but lsat is fnnuy, but i dno't get the moarl form tihs sroty :D

steven [id], 23 May 2008, 4:17 reply
wah yuor cmoemnt is mroe fnuny tahn the oetrhs!

yuku [sg], 23 May 2008, 4:49 reply
wiii...keren..
thx ya cerpennya..mo w bkin bwt tgas inggris w ne..
hahaha..


icha [id], 16 Jul 2008, 6:11 reply
kerenn.. lucuu... buat tgs gw nii ;D

iirmaa ;) [id], 27 Jul 2008, 11:46 reply
hahahahah. garing tapi kocak.

indriy [id], 27 Jul 2008, 12:29 reply
Otre lah....tapi short story nya kk SHORT banget ya.

zilly [id], 29 Jul 2008, 12:56 reply
ihhh....luthu and keren bgt

asty [id], 5 Aug 2008, 1:54 reply
bgus jga critanya,, tpi di akhirnya kurang memwaskan.. haha.. msa Gun cma minjem dwid pdhal Gina uda dagdigdug sgala.. tapi okelah.. hehe..

cla [id], 7 Aug 2008, 12:05 reply
wahhhhhhh bruntung banget bs tahu website ini..i am so happy cos i can explore my vocabulary n structure..thx a million :D

benveyo [id], 12 Sep 2008, 7:51 reply
nice story.....
I am so glad to find this story
best regard


Adzkia Tanjung [id], 17 Sep 2008, 4:39 reply
Aku sampai terkencing-kencing di celana baca endingnya. Passionated sekali, bikin anu gua makin anu dan pengen nganuin anunya kamu. grinned

fred [id], 23 Sep 2008, 14:09 reply
ya...ampun dapet inspirasi dari mana tuh...tadinya pengen di copy buat tugas introtulit...tapi lucu juga

andra [id], 14 Oct 2008, 7:11 reply
yaaaaaaaaaaaaaach....................lumayan bagus.cm,masih ada yang kurang 1!haruze Gina terbengong2X donx!klo ga,malu dkitlah Gina............

utie [id], 18 Oct 2008, 4:48 reply
cerpenmu lumayan bagus, thaks ya bisa aq pake ngajar.

udita [id], 18 Oct 2008, 4:49 reply
yach,lumayan bagus c,,,cuma masih ada yg kurang c,,,Gina kurang bengong ato klo ga,malu dikit ke'..............

putrie [id], 18 Oct 2008, 5:37 reply
good story. good create and if you fat is not means you is bad. like me now i'm think i'm the best same like the other woman
( )
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dayu [id], 19 Oct 2008, 11:47 reply
I think this story is very good...........

yuli [id], 22 Oct 2008, 7:06 reply
alhamdulillah ketemu cerpen yang da english-indonesianya.....jadi bisa ngerjain tugas dengan tenang...thanks yaaaaa

kahfi [id], 24 Oct 2008, 6:52 reply
iiiiiiiiiiiihhhhh aq ketipu,q pikir berakhir dengan pacaran.tp g p2 aq suka jail bangets ceritanya.bikin lagi donk !!!!

Lia [id], 24 Oct 2008, 7:44 reply
pertama Q baca cerpen ini rasanya aneh. lha gimana, bahasa gaul yg begitu memasyarakat di kalangan Muda di zaman sekrang ini ternyata juga bisa di translate kan ke English juga ya.
Bagus utk ukuran cerpen spontan & kocak walau di teks asli berbahasa gaul. di Englishnya pun tak kalah Funny & Loonely..... hehehe
buat yang nulis, met dapet ketawaku...
Hahahahaha.......................


Amik [id], 6 Nov 2008, 8:14 reply
waiiizzzzzz bgUz BnGt CerItx......
cRiTaX q AmBiL Yh buAt TGaZ cErPeN Q.....
HEhE...AlX cRiTaX bGz.....


widya [id], 8 Nov 2008, 4:26 reply
Good

Ana [id], 10 Nov 2008, 3:59 reply
wuachhhhh,,kren bgd sichhhh nt cerpen nya,,
kpn2 bwt yg lbh ren lg yaw,,,
akn sll q tunggu kog,,
slam knl yaw,,


PaiJem_sUmiRaH_nDarI,, [id], 18 Nov 2008, 3:46 reply
I Love ur story.....!


aizha [cn], 18 Nov 2008, 9:53 reply
This short story is so simple but useful. Thanks, you have help me to increase my vocab. What next?

John [id], 30 Nov 2008, 14:49 reply
Thank you! For the next one, you can read another short story: Cerpen: Mimpi Sepasang Manusia

yuku [sg], 30 Nov 2008, 17:44 reply
hek..hek..hek aku bacanya sampek 2 x.. bagian akhir bikin kepala jatuh bangun........good...

fans [id], 1 Dec 2008, 6:11 reply
menurut gue gendut itu bukan akhir dari segalanya toh banyak juga orang yang gendut tapi bisa jadi aktris, aktor, dsb and dont give up okay?

tanya [id], 1 Dec 2008, 11:21 reply
ag jg ndut,tp ag msh te2p manusia,yg pnya tujuan,hehe....

cacing [id], 2 Dec 2008, 9:51 reply
your story lumayan juga..........
rin cuma mow ucpin thanks yaw..,,,,,jdi sa buat tugas dari dosen


RirIn [id], 5 Dec 2008, 6:40 reply
q jg sm kya ririn,mw ngucapin trmksh bnyk udh meringankn tgsQ yg sklh d SBI ini

mr.X [id], 5 Dec 2008, 14:24 reply
hehehe idup tu berfariasi bro....nyantai....tunjukkan bakat-mu s3m@n9@t

kiki [id], 25 Dec 2008, 5:15 reply
minta short story yg sedih-sedih dong!

dea [--], 8 Mar 2009, 4:46 reply
haha.......ak jg ndut and jd korban cubitan........

nana [id], 12 Mar 2009, 3:16 reply
I like this story. The ending is unpredictable. quite suprising.

Muhammad Iqbal Isnaeni [id], 17 Mar 2009, 7:16 reply
ini lucu sekali hahaha bagian terakhirnya lucu sekali lebih lucu dari pipi nya gin.

HAHAHA [id], 31 Mar 2009, 12:56 reply
Crtnya bgus kali Q ambi ya??? buat tugas Q ma ksih sering2 buat cerpen ya!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


F8T [id], 5 Apr 2009, 14:03 reply
ceritanya cukup lucu dan menggemaskan...
pengen ikt cubit tuh pipi yang tembam.
heheheheheheheehehehee


andrey [id], 14 Apr 2009, 6:35 reply
wow....it's very interesting short story i think.
this story is funny :)


mida [id], 19 Apr 2009, 5:47 reply
very gooooooooooooood and very gooooooooooodddddddddddddddddd story

pR@nI$tiN [id], 24 Apr 2009, 7:27 reply
wew.. ada sedihnya ada lucunya juga .
seruu jugaaaa :))


rebecca [--], 26 Apr 2009, 8:29 reply
this story is good and very interesting

echa [id], 11 May 2009, 5:32 reply
thank you very much,matur sembah suwun,matur suksama,klo maen ke bali blg aku,aku tnggal di kuta.

ANS [id], 18 May 2009, 12:52 reply
lutu...lutu...lutu, storyna lutu bangetz

AZIAH [id], 21 May 2009, 7:46 reply
hahaha .. dari awal.nyh ajj udda lutcu .. keyend bgd neeh crita.nyh

amalia [id], 5 Jun 2009, 11:50 reply
hahaha... garing-garing... kayak kacang euy...

nasa [id], 12 Jun 2009, 5:44 reply
thanks for all yg dah bikin nie, gw jdi bsa ngerjain tugas cepet. . . . . . . . .

fatahan [id], 15 Jun 2009, 13:07 reply
huakak_kak_kak..........
gadha nyang lebih garing ageh neeh............?!
wa kaseh lema jhempuol 2 koe tati atuna penjem we' mu sit


u2l_chan [id], 22 Jun 2009, 5:30 reply
thanks for your posting, it's very help to study english. for next time, i'm wish you can better than this day

imam [id], 3 Aug 2009, 16:06 reply
p`misiiiii...
Blh ng`py cRpen na Gk? bwt Tgz neei. Btw yg nLz Spa yach??????


moe2 [id], 12 Oct 2009, 6:12 reply
it's FuNny.. TwO tUmbS uP dUehh....

ViRdhA [id], 14 Oct 2009, 14:38 reply
nice story,,, make me laugh,,, hahahahahaha,,, four thumbs up(include my feet thumbs) hehehe

Frans [--], 27 Oct 2009, 12:02 reply
AqUe cUAntIIIIeq gEtOH . . .
hEe , hEe , hEe . .


pUezAH [id], 30 Oct 2009, 2:28 reply
buat para orang2 GENDUT.. sadarlah bahwa apapun itu lebih baik, karna sadar akan kekuranganmu, tp akan msih ada kelebihanmu.. So don't worry be happy..

gadiz [no], 9 Nov 2009, 10:24 reply
mksih ya..
ceerpenya bagus bgt


medisya [id], 19 Nov 2009, 1:37 reply
ini narrative text bukan sih ?

winieeee [--], 1 Dec 2009, 13:58 reply
baguuuuus;yg plg pntg lucu

dewi [id], 20 Dec 2009, 10:18 reply
nice story, n funny, it makes me laugh anyway,,,
keep writing n let ur mind free on writing,,,, ganbatte...!!!


mei mei [id], 8 Jan 2010, 2:25 reply
lumayan lah...
its funny...


zee [--], 11 Jan 2010, 11:05 reply
uahaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa.............................

david [tw], 22 Jan 2010, 2:21 reply
wah2....critanya bikin aq senyum2 ndiri....kirain gila...
EMANG SMUA CEW NDUT DIPERLAKUKAN KYK GT YA????


oyek [--], 5 Feb 2010, 8:46 reply
kerennnnnnnnnnnnn....................

siska [--], 17 Feb 2010, 14:13 reply
ih wow, this story its very funny,,,,, pkokx kerennnnnnnnnn


vira [--], 19 Feb 2010, 5:08 reply
biasa aja.............

dede [id], 20 Mar 2010, 6:54 reply
good short story,,
I like u'r story,
make better again with others story......
ok......
good luck,,_^^_


resty [id], 25 Mar 2010, 6:35 reply
Aq awlx brpqr klo ini crita romantis...
Eh pas bc endingx..,trxta ini crita lucu.hahaha
lanjutin dong kisah gin n gunx alx lucu...
Thanks. 8-)


Isidora [us], 9 Apr 2010, 5:44 reply
bwagus bget dech crita x n menarik bwanget gtu dech

defa [id], 21 Apr 2010, 7:51 reply
gua kira mau apa .....
very funny ... :O bkin mules


mamuro [id], 2 May 2010, 2:33 reply
wakawkawkawk.....kocak abiss.....wa kira si gunawan mw ngomong gin aku cinta kamu....eh malah gin boleh mnjem duit gk???Grrrrr

Synister gates [id], 15 Jun 2010, 12:47 reply
wah...gile...ckkakakakka....lanjut....xixixiixix

devi [id], 31 Jul 2010, 3:05 reply
wah,bagus jgk storynye,tp kurang menarik tp hebat dan bagus....

malaysia [my], 29 Aug 2010, 6:13 reply
bleh ktawa bntar yow....? ha ha ha ha ha ha , cukp ! al hikayah jamil jidan .......... man ya musooni'ah ? bagus bnget short story nya,Q iri tw......... tar kalo ke madiun mampr ke ponpes BABUSSALAM yow......

nurul [--], 29 Sep 2010, 15:13 reply
Eswete BeGeTe
kwkwkwk


ari [us], 7 Oct 2010, 8:43 reply
kerrreennt

ina [id], 15 Oct 2010, 4:24 reply
WaduH. . CritaX bgUs n LUcu. . Hm aQ ambil bwt TUgas skuL e.. ThanKz..

Nony Ratuloly [us], 29 Oct 2010, 10:48 reply
wahhh ceritanya keren-----dan tak disangkah ternyata akhirnya seperti itu hehehhe
tapi saya suka ceritanya :)


khiky [--], 24 Nov 2010, 11:19 reply
wooww....
kreenndzzz bgeet ,,,
gw skaa crtaa loo :)


driivanny :) [id], 28 Nov 2010, 5:38 reply
untung
33
8h


untung [id], 2 Dec 2010, 6:22 reply
I like Your Story .... May i KnoW aBout You hehehehehe Hello my name MarLinda rike Koropit but you can call ,me MarLinda Ok ... Maybe i don't have Fb hehheeh ...

BanjarbaRu [id], 11 Jan 2011, 7:54 reply
ya ampun , ko cerita gini bgt ya ? hufh ...

sp aja [id], 26 Jan 2011, 10:17 reply
permulaan yg bagus untuk sebuah cerpen. kalo di kembangin jadi buku bisa lebih bagus lagi nih. apalgi kalo ceritanya koje ttg struggle from "fat to thin to fat" with some comdey in it. marvelous bggt kan. kalo dah bagus kirim ke redaksi www.bukune.com nti kamu bisa jadi penulis handal. kalo mau buat story bareng u bisa hub in i aja, huahuahuahuahua ...

Fat Bastard [--], 11 Feb 2011, 6:29 reply
wkwkwkwkwkwkwk.........
garink abi3z!!!!!!!!!
sampe terpetal2 ke luar negeri... ^______________^


rien_cho [id], 11 Feb 2011, 7:53 reply
banyak buangetz. . . .but this good

arti [--], 24 Mar 2011, 5:45 reply
tapi gx nyampe keluar negri juga kaLeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

arti [--], 24 Mar 2011, 6:22 reply
wa... g'ad yg lebih 'short' ya ceritanya? -u-

tata [--], 17 Apr 2011, 3:34 reply
yeeah , kereen*
not bad lah
:D
tapi lain kali lebih panjang dong


oming [--], 23 Apr 2011, 11:23 reply
nice story.,so funny
you've talent in writing,.


anjun [id], 3 May 2011, 4:06 reply
wow....i like it...
emang nasib cewek ndut,,,,,pipi na slalu jd korban


aisyah [--], 5 May 2011, 7:24 reply
hahahhaha tersinggung aku kan aku uga gendut,.. tapi seru dech ceritanya

nurleni [--], 7 May 2011, 14:50 reply
Heeeehhehhee....
Good Short story


eka lestary [--], 7 Jun 2011, 6:24 reply
"open ending"....shrt stry tht makes me guess wht wll be than......bgs jga v kyk cba pke' org ktga tggl main actorx surely lbh bgs.......heheeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

anthony [id], 1 Jul 2011, 12:44 reply
wow ! its amazing !! this is very nice !! menurut dari tata bahasa englishnya waw .... seger buat dilihat

Adhi [--], 13 Jul 2011, 16:08 reply
very good.............
oz mw tny nie lw mw iktn krm cerpen gmn z?????


isti [id], 16 Jul 2011, 15:47 reply
nice short story tp ending-nya lucu

indonesia [--], 30 Jul 2011, 8:38 reply
bagus. cos membuat short story itu adalah (menulis) sesuatu is the fourth language competence in language and it is the most difficult. Bravo bwt writer. Truskan to write. It can make money by writing.

suriansyah n [--], 2 Aug 2011, 14:37 reply
I think the story is good and also the combination of language you use, Indoensia and English. It's very useful for student of english departement in fiction translation subject..

Has [--], 25 Aug 2011, 18:14 reply
Bgus ,.

Vany [us], 15 Sep 2011, 7:50 reply
I like thIS story ,. C0z it's amazing nd sngt mendEBarkn ..
Hehe .. :-)


AngeL asALaka [us], 15 Sep 2011, 7:56 reply
Klo gina nya pengen langsing...minum MALILEA ajha....
hehheheheehehe...
I like it...cerita pertamanya bkin penasaran...
Tp trakhir2 nya jadiii luucthhuu.... :D


Rhey [--], 30 Sep 2011, 22:44 reply
myan wt tugas
tq


masayu [--], 23 Oct 2011, 4:28 reply
bagus,bangetz,gimana tuh kelanjutannya apa mereka jadian?

esnaini.umar,gmail.com [id], 9 Nov 2011, 11:51 reply
I like with short story comedy....
I hope many people can make comedy story again


feby [--], 10 Nov 2011, 3:53 reply
i like yours short story
mantap


dhany smith [--], 16 Nov 2011, 1:22 reply
i like ur short story....could u make a short story about my self.....hheeee

lis_julianti@yahoo.com [--], 3 Dec 2011, 4:59 reply
mau kopi, nanti tetap menyediakan link sumber

matthew [id], 12 Jan 2012, 10:51 reply
i like this story..

tika [--], 17 Jan 2012, 5:27 reply
interesting...
really interesting...
could you make the same story as like that???
i'd like to share and take it for my wallmagazine


phantom [--], 18 Jan 2012, 13:31 reply
doooh sumpah anjrit keren bgt!!!! bagus lucuuuu!


rendi [id], 11 Feb 2012, 12:18 reply
thanks for the great post

You like, iam pleased [--], 14 Feb 2012, 19:07 reply
I think i'ts...good story...but in the part end... Make disaponted..... Kasihan gine she had hopped,,,gunawan will say love to him...... Ternyata just pinjem uang..tp itu lcu.... Di lnjtin lgi ea critanya....

Meylin [--], 12 May 2012, 7:25 reply
sabal ya diblang endut hehehehe sama ....senasip bgt sma que
cra que diet ikutan spinning gelaaaaa 1 blan


rhey [--], 20 May 2012, 10:19 reply
funny stroy ,, n bikn deg22n jg ehehe

shii [id], 20 Jul 2012, 1:24 reply
wkwkwkw.. ngakak abizzzzz

eko [--], 31 Jul 2012, 5:02 reply
great story,..i like it,...double language,..

ima [--], 17 Aug 2012, 10:45 reply
you so kampret gun.. yeah.. :D :p

Lilis green [--], 24 Feb 2013, 5:33 reply
This Story very good, but I think you don't need to make the translate

Dila [--], 2 May 2014, 15:19 reply